NARRATIVE AUDIENCE FEEDBACK

We spoke to some potential audience members, a 30yr old, female actress and a 34yr old, male, director.  We chose to speak to these two individuals because they are part of our target audience and obviously have experience in casting and acting. In the interview we asked them about our narrative.

They thought;

"I like the narrative, it's simple but effective which is imperative for a short film. I think you need to get clearer ideas and structure, at the moment it's a bit … hazy"

"if you make the motifs like the cereal or something clearer you'll have a better continuity"

"My favourite thing is the simplicity, I just think it's really sad, the poor mother, it makes you want to know what has happened and what happens next, it's great!"

From this we've taken that they liked the simplicity and that to make the narrative better the clarity of images and scenes needs to improve. We will make the 'motifs' like the Rubik's cube more obvious and symbolic.

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